Writing Explanation

How children learn at school

Children are curious to know things. They learn in many different ways. If they don’t know what to do they ask for help. They watch others and copy them because learning is a big part of their lives.

They are curious to learn things because they want to be able to do it. They ask for feedback and feed forward so that they can improve in the areas they need more improvement on. They watch their friends to learn new things. They help themselves by taking risks.

They learn about things that interests them. When children take risks  not only are they learning learning new things, they also get an experience of what it is like.

Children practice their skills to improve their learning. One of the things they do is ask questions and focus more. They gain knowledge from others by asking and use it to improve their skills.

Children are curious to learn things. Not all the time children know what to do so, they ask questions. They learn in many different ways. learning is a big part of their lives. They watch others and copy them.

I wrote this together with my partner Oh hsen. After we had finished we went to another pair and asked them to proof read it. We also asked them to give us feedback and feed-forward.

Two word sentence

In writing we had a look at two word sentences, two word sentences are simple sentences. Using the simple sentence we added in FANBOYS which makes it a complex sentence which joins two simple sentences or ideas together with a connective. Using the complex sentence we used AAWWUIBBIS to make it a compound sentence. 

Hyperbole

Our focus today for writing was hyperbole. A hyperbole is when you use extreme exaggeration in a sentence. For example "My heart was pounding out of my chest", that is impossible but it is used to express an emotion. I wrote a story about "A hunted alleyway" home that includes at least five hyperbole. I found that putting hyperbole into my writing can make it more interesting.

Simile 2

Today for Writing we had to create a DLO and match the sentences so they make scene. This is my language feature DLO for week 3.

The Mysterious Walkway

I started feeling nervous. All I could see was the light from torches going on and off as we made our way along the gravel pathway that took us into the darkness.

As we crossed the bridge all I could hear was the sound of a waterfall rushing to the pool below. Everything around me smelt damp. My torch light showed the stairs in front of me. I grabbed the handrail and gripped it tight as other people's voices got louder and louder. Everyone sounded scared!

I started to see a light. As I walked closer I saw that the light was from our camp. The night walk was fun but I was happy to be back in the light until I saw the size of the cricket on the deck! I got a big fright when it flew onto my shirt. I quickly flicked it off.

Today we had to write a recount about an activity that we did a camp. I chose to write about the night walk. I have explained what I have heard, what I have seen, and what I could feel. For my plan I used the y chart and the TREE template.

Why is my blog unique?

Why my blog is Unique?

I have a blog so I can show the world my reading, writing, maths, and inquiry digital learning. Our blogs show the world that we participate and work together as a group in our class LS2.

My blog is unique because it helps me to learn, create, and share. It helps me learn, by other people giving me feedback in the comments section. My blog  helps me to create by looking at my older posts and learning from them.

Through my blog I am able to share, by showing my blog posts with the world. On my blog I have 165 posts all in total. In 2014 I had 35 blog posts. In 2015 I had 19 blog posts and in 2016 I had 95 blog posts. My blog has 5,380 blog page views.

When I first got my blog I was in room 5 with Miss Thomas. The bad thing about our blogs is that you need internet to access it because it’s an online blog and the great thing about our blogs is that it shows the world what kind of work I do in class.

I think that my blog is special and unique because it shows who I am. The other best thing about our blogs is that it can’t get lost or be thrown away. I think that everyone should have a blog because it is like another easy hack to life.

Our blogs are special because it shows the world my digital learning. My blog shows the world that we participate and work together as a group in our class.

In writing we have been writing an explanation on why is my blog unique. This DLO shows why my blog is unique. I hope you enjoy reading it.

Comparative and Superlative

In writing we have been learning about Comparatives and Superlatives. Mrs K made a list of adjectives and we had to write the comparatives and superlatives of the words on the list. Then we had to pick one of the comparatives and superlatives. When we finished choosing our comparatives and superlatives we had to find images for the comparatives and superlatives. The comparative and superlative I choose was fast, faster, and fastest.

Quick Writing

 Today we were focusing around narratives writing because next term in week 3 we will be writing about narratives. We used the narrative criteria. The 1st sentence is about who the main character is. Then the 2nd is about where he/she lives. The 3rd is about sentence describes the characters talent. The 4th sentence is about the problem. The 5th  sentence is about how the character felt and then the last sentence is about how the problem is solved. I worked collaboratively with charlize and Sakae. I think we will do really well and good in our writing assessments. 

Sketchnote

LS2 have been using sketch notes so that we can record our learning in our ways using pictures, words or even numbers. Sketch notes helps us make a learning story in our own words. Sketch notes also help us to make connection. One interesting fact that I learnt about sketch notes is that it doesn't have to be perfect because only I need to understand it. Our first attempt at sketch notes was about question because we already knew about the topic. Our second topic was athletes  

Magic Box Poem

I will put into the box …

The silky black fur off my blind cats back

My mum’s red flowers inside the box.

My photos of when I was born.

I will put into the box …

Jewelry made of diamonds gleaming in the sunshine.  

The sharp white shell from the sandy white beach.

The tiny plastic hospital band from when I was born.

I will put into the box …

Memories of happy times when I win my games.

Food with the taste of delicious gooey caramel.

My country’s flag proudly waving in the wind on the Olympic pole.   

My box is fashioned from shining gold and sparkling gems, with butterflies bursting with color on the lid and I will put all my secrets in the corners.

Its hinges are made out of yummy red & white striped candy bars.

I shall dream in my box.

This week's writing we had to use our imagination to write your own magic box poem that paints a picture in our minds of the person reading the poem. My partner in this activity was Ma'ata.

Magic Box Poem

I will put into the box …

The silky black fur off my blind cats back

My mum’s red flowers inside the box.

My photos of when I was born.

I will put into the box …

Jewelry made of diamonds gleaming in the sunshine.  

The sharp white shell from the sandy white beach.

The tiny plastic hospital band from when I was born.

I will put into the box …

Memories of happy times when I win my games.

Food with the taste of delicious gooey caramel.

My country’s flag proudly waving in the wind on the Olympic pole.   

My box is fashioned from shining gold and sparkling gems, with butterflies bursting with color on the lid and I will put all my secrets in the corners.

Its hinges are made out of yummy red & white striped candy bars.

I shall dream in my box.

This week's writing we had to use our imagination to write your own magic box poem that paints a picture in our minds of the person reading the poem. My partner in this activity was ma'ata.

Story Starters - The House

The House

One day there was a police officer by the name of James he was just a normal cop. Until the day he got promoted he had been sent to another town and became an investigator. He was new at it but he started getting the hang of it. He had to wake up early in the morning and go to work all the cases that he worked on were very easy.

But then one day he had been given a serious crime the case was of a family that had hanged themselves. He was sitting in his office when he had thought of an idea that he was going to move into the house that the crime was at. So he moved homes the next day he went out to the back yard to look for anything that would help him solve the crime, but there was nothing.He went back inside and unpacked all his stuff it took him two days to finish unpacking his stuff.

His house was finally finished and he could get back to work, he looked around the house for evidence but no luck there. That night when James was asleep he woke up from a nightmare he had heard a noise then he got up and went to look around the house no one was there, so he thought. James looked out the windows still nobody he opened the door no one he looked out the window that showed the tree of the family that had hanged themselves.

He could see a little shadow go past he went outside to have a look. There was nobody, But then he turned around and there was a dog. The dog ran away then James went back inside. James went back to sleep. When he woke up the next morning he found movie films in the basement. It took him a whole day to watch all the films he finally found some answers in the films.the films were of the family dying on the tree and of what happened.

He had showed the police the film of the family and he found the truth the family didn’t hang themselves a man named Pam Joseph forced them to hang themselves or he would kill their daughter Sophie. James moved in to another house and carried on with his life.

THE END

Today for writing we did story starters. I had to Write a horror story about a young police officer who solves crimes.

Speeches

Today in LS2 we practiced our speeches and picked two or one people from our groups for the competition in the school hall. Our speeches had to be 2:30 seconds that The people in my group were June, Pote, Sebastian, and AJ. 

Shoe narrative

This is my writing task for today. In writing Fifita and I were working together. Fifita and I really had fun. 

Chunky challenge - Sub

Due to global warming,cities could be completely Submerged. The only way to get around the city was by travelling in a Submarine. The temperature had reached Subzero. The Subway had completely vanished. As Evelyn hopped out of the train she realized she stepped on subsoil and noticed that she was sinking,this was subnormal.

Today for writing we did our chunky challenge we had to look for words that start with sub and write it in the document. Then we had to write a paragraph with 8 or 5 of the words in it then post it.

The Tsunami

Last week we Miss Donaldson's writing group started a narrative story plan.With the plan we had to write a narrative story and then post it on our blogs. I wrote about a tsunami.

Narrative planing

Yesterday Miss Donaldson's writing group started writing a narrative planning and we had to use mindmeister a mindmeister is a mind map.The learning intention is to write a plan for a narrative story.

How to write an orientation

Yesterday me and Mia started this activity we had to make a presentation and had to explain what is in an orientation and how to write one.

Orientation writing

On Monday in the writing block we started this orientation writing we had to come up with some character names a setting and a problem.Then we had to come up with a hook after that we could start our orientation.After we finished writing our orientation we had to add draft into our writing.Draft stands for delete, rearrange, add, fix and talk. 

Week 5 writing

Quick write

There was money everywhere, and there was people that came inside the house with some rubbish bags. They put the money inside the rubbish bags, as they were putting the money in the rubbish bags they heard a big noise BANG! one of them asked “What’s that noise?” The other person replied “ It was a door.” After a few of the bags were full they would rush outside to put it into the van. They needed the money to buy a new house, new clothes, new car, and new furniture. As they were filling the rest of the bags they heard another BANG!

Last week we started writing a story with dialogue in our books. Then today we had to make a new document and copy the story from our books into the document. After doing that we had to add draft to our story. Draft stands for delete, rearrange, adding, fix and talk. Once we where finished we had to blog it.